Hi, my name is Anna Evans. I am a junior at Roosevelt High School. Some things you should know about me as a person are that my family and friends are very important to me. Along with family and friends, religion and succeeding in the best ways that I can are very important in my life and in forMing the person I am today. The goals right now in my life are to get good grades and be the best in everything I do.
This year, I am not involved in any sports but I am involved in the Varsity Show Choir through Roosevelt High School. In my opinion it is very important to keep yourself involved in some sort of activity. Not only to keep yourself well rounded and occupied, but also gives opportunities to meet others you may not normally get to know.
This semester in A.P. Lang, I am hoping to gain many different characteristics as a writer. I would like to learn how to make my writinas flow more easily, use bigger more intelligent sounding vocabulary, along with knowing where to correctly place the words, and just overall have a strong, sturdy way of writing that will produce accomplished pieces of writing, As a writer so far, my biggest challenges have been finding the correct topics that will keep the readers attention, along with using intelligent vocabulary and diction.
I am excited to work together and I am looking forward to hearing everything you have to say to help improve my writing.
Thank you!!
Anna
Hello Anna! My name is Amanda Bellis, and I am a senior English major at Drake. My future plans at this moment include going to graduate school for a master’s in Library Science, after which I hope to become a youth services librarian, eventually working my way to a position as a library director. My plans and goals have changed several times, however (I have changed my major 3 times), and I would like to gain experience with the teaching side of writing in the event that I work in academia or in a school-library setting, which is why I am taking this course. As a bit of background, I am a Des Moines native, and I graduated from East High School in addition to going through the Central Academy program, where I took all of my English courses. As a result, I consider myself to be well-grounded in the art of writing, from the side of the writer. Other than occasionally helping my friends with papers, however, I have little experience with writing from an educator’s standpoint, so I hope that working with you will not only be beneficial to you as a student (which I hope it will be!) but also helpful to me, both as a student by helping me to see my assignments from the professor’s viewpoint, and as someone hoping to work with young people in the future by helping me grasp how best to help them. I’m excited to have the chance to work with you, and I cannot wait to get started!
Amanda
Personal Reflection on Topic of Inquiry(posted RHS January 27 -- 171 January 29)
Prejudgment is everywhere. We may try and deny and say that we don't do it personally ourselves, but that's not true. At some point in everyone's life weDave all been guilty of passing unjustified judgments. Whether it's because of someone's clothing, someones hair, where they live, what they drive or where theyre from; people will always find themselves looking at others with the idea that they already know what the other is like.
I admit, I've been a continuous offender of this prejudging habit. I have done it without thinking, and sometimes even without noticing. It branches off of stereotypes. Society in my opinion has done such a good job at grouping people together into divided,specific groups bed upon appearance, thoughts and class. That's not how it should be, but thats how many of us have been trained to think, including myself at times.
I feel myself changing a little bit when it comes to this. My perspective has been changed greatly because of my own personal experiences I have gone through. I've been prejudged in many ways. I'm sure in ways I have no idea about. But there is one way I know, and it's the judgement of how,"nothing could be wrong in my life." How I have everything I could ask for.
Well yes, I've been blessed with a wonderful, privileged life with great true friends and an inseparable family. But there are deeper issues in my life that only few people know about. Life has been hard. There have been events that have happened that have haunted the members of my family every single day. Experiences that no one could even begin to try and understand without actually living.
I cringe when people tell me that I havent experienced struggles in my life or that my family is perfect. I want to shout at them, "If you only knew!!!!". But in the end, really what I've learned through it all, has been that no one knows anything. Everyone may think they have it all figured out. Everyone may think that there's nothing other than what is seen on the surface. But I've learned that there is no perfect life and everyone has their own personal issues and problems, whatever they might be. So that leads me to my question, why do we prejudge and stereotype?
Comments: Prejudgment is everywhere. We may try and deny and say that we don't do it personally ourselves, but that's not true. At some point in everyone's life weDave all been guilty of passing unjustified judgments[A1] . Whether it's because of someone's clothing, someones hair, where they live, what they drive or where theyre from; people will always find themselves looking at others with the idea that they already know what the other is like.I admit, I've been a continuous offender of this prejudging habit. I have done it without thinking, and sometimes even without noticing. It branches off of stereotypes. Society in my opinion has done such a good job at grouping people together into divided,specific groups bed upon appearance, thoughts and class[A2] . That's not how it should be, but thats how many of us have been trained[A3] to think, including myself at times.I feel myself changing a little bit when it comes to this. My perspective has been changed greatly because of my own personal experiences I have gone through. I've been prejudged in many ways[A4] . I'm sure in ways I have no idea about. But there is one way I know, and it's the judgement of how,"nothing could be wrong in my life." How I have everything I could ask for.Well yes, I've been blessed with a wonderful, privileged life with great true friends and an inseparable family. But there are deeper issues in my life that only few people know about. Life has been hard. There have been events that have happened that have haunted the members of my family every single day. Experiences that no one could even begin to try and understand without actually living[A5] .I cringe when people tell me that I havent experienced struggles in my life or that my family is perfect. I want to shout at them, "If you only knew!!!!". But in the end, really what I've learned through it all, has been that no one knows anything. Everyone may think they have it all figured out. Everyone may think that there's nothing other than what is seen on the surface. But I've learned that there is no perfect life and everyone has their own personal issues and problems, whatever they might be. So that leads me to my question, why do we prejudge and stereotype[A6] ? [A1]Have you done this? What was the situation? [A2]What does society think about these groups? What do you think? [A3]This is a fascinating idea-is it society that is training us, or something else? How does the training happen? [A4]You list one example below, but are there other ways that you know of besides your main example? [A5]It sounds like this could be something really personal, but is it something you could share (even if you only share part of it)? I find myself wanting to really see the contrast between the person who appears happy, and the person who is struggling with something that people can’t see. [A6]Big question! Did any thoughts or opinions about this develop while you were writing this paper?
You’ve tackled quite an issue with stereotypes and prejudice, and I commend you for it! You’ve certainly got a grasp on the place these issues have in society. I did find myself wondering a bit about the place they hold in your life. You do mention a perception that people have of you which is incorrect, but I found myself wondering how that affects you on a daily basis, and exactly how the real you differs from the you that everyone perceives. I think you have a solid framework on the issues here-it just needs a little more “you.” Don’t be afraid of that!
Rough Draft Definition (posted RHS February 3 -- 171 February 5)
Predjudice Rough Draft-
Prejudice is everywhere. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance has become upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized. The most stereotypical prejudice that is recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion hat is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, is the fact that everyone is an individual, everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
Comments: Prejudice is everywhere. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. Whether positively or negatively,the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience[A1] , takes part in forming everyone as individuals."First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street[A2] . Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance has become upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized[A3] . The most stereotypical prejudice that is recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have[A4] . Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion hat is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, is the fact that everyone is an individual, everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
You’ve got a great framework of ideas started here. I commented above on what I read as your definition of prejudice, and I noticed several expansions on that definition in the following paragraphs. You certainly offered details as to the ways in which prejudice manifests itself, which I thought helped in defining it. I did find myself wondering, however, if you have any examples which you could offer regarding the types of prejudice you mention (either something from your own life, or something you’ve seen or read) which could provide your reader with a mental image of what you’re talking about. [A1]I am reading this part of the sentence as your definition of prejudice. Is there a way that you can make your definition easier to pick out? [A2]You offer several areas of appearance that may be judged in this section. Are there specific types of cars or clothing that are associated with specific assumptions? What are they? [A3]How? [A4]You’ve mentioned several ways in which people are judged, and I see the connection to your reflection paper with this topic. Is there a way to connect the two? Do you have any personal experiences regarding prejudice that you could bring to this paper to strengthen your arguments? Revision Definition (posted RHS February 10 -- 171 February 12 )
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, Prejudice is stated as, thepre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience. This takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as put together or driving an expensive car such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice. Comments: Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, Prejudice is stated as, thepre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience. This takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as put together or driving an expensive car such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society.[A1] Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in[A2] . No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals[A3] . People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
This is looking great! I could clearly see your definition, and I appreciated how the paper expanded upon that by providing examples of preconceived ideas. Try running spell-check and reading your paper aloud to check for errors before you turn in the final draft (it’s best to wait until the end when you know you won’t change something you’ve fixed). [A1]This looks like you’re introducing a new idea.-would it help to separate it in a new paragraph? [A2]Any specific inferences come to mind? [A3]How might a prejudice affect or change someone?
Final Definition (posted RHS February 17 -- 171 February 19 )then
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, "Prejudice is stated as,the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience"(Dictionary.com). This takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everything." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are close minded enough, that's all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the other's whole life story.Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as "put-together", or if they're driving an expensive cars such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. Some have inferred that my life my not have struggle based upon the family life that they may view me having, some have even gone as far as assuming i have a certain personality based off of how I look. I know these judgements, because I've been told about them by individuals who have pre-judged me. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
The pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals, can affect individuals in both positive and negative ways. Prejudice upon a person can lead them to start to believe in what they may be viewed as. It may change them as individuals, either by making them more confident or more self conscious. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice. Comments: Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, "Prejudice is stated as,the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience"(Dictionary.com[A1] ). This takes part in forming everyone as individuals[A2] .
"First Impressions are everything." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are close minded enough, that's all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the other's whole life story.Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as "put-together", or if they're driving an expensive cars such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off.[A3] Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. Some have inferred that my life my not have struggle based upon the family life that they may view me having, some have even gone as far as assuming i have a certain personality based off of how I look[A4] . I know these judgements, because I've been told about them by individuals who have pre-judged me. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
The pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals, can affect individuals in both positive and negative ways. Prejudice upon a person can lead them to start to believe in what they may be viewed as. It may change them as individuals, either by making them more confident or more self conscious[A5] . People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
This paper has a come a long way from the first draft, and I really enjoyed seeing arguments begin to develop. You have a great argument in your last paragraph, when you say that people sometimes change into the prejudices against them. It would be great if you could introduce that argument earlier in the paper, and use the examples of prejudice you have to show how a person might be changed by them. There are still a few spelling errors (F7 in Microsoft Word will run through those for you). You’ve got a solid definition here, and a great start at an argument to go with it. [A1]If you site Dictionary.com in parentheses, you don’t have to refer to it within the sentence too. [A2]Could you bring in the argument from the last paragraph here? Is there a way to add to this sentence what you say later about people changing to reflect the prejudices against them? [A3]This seems to go along with the argument you make in your final paragraph. Is there a way to connect the two? Maybe try making the argument earlier and tying it to the types of prejudice you mention? How might a person’s behavior or attitude change if someone constantly has the same prejudice against them? How might a prejudice change by how people try to portray themselves? [A4]I appreciated seeing how this affected you personally here. It helps illustrate how universal prejudice is. [A5]Here is where I start to see an argument along with your definition. Is there a way you can incorporate this idea into the rest of the paper?
EXTRA CREDIT: Revision after Final Draft Of Definition Essay
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their appearance, opinions and also their social class. "Prejudice is stated as the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience"(Dictionary.com). This takes part in forming everyone as individuals. Often, the prejudices put upon someone shapes them into that persona because of the continual grouping. They begin to believe what they're told and fall into that prejudice.
"First Impressions are everything." That famous saying remains true. But to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are close minded enough, that's all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Appearance means everything to some people. They think that one look tells the other's whole life story.Well, that is not true. Prejudice comes into play here. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as "put-together", or if they're driving an expensive cars such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just as appearance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class would be the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on what they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. Some have inferred that my life may not have struggle based upon the family life that they may view me having, some have even gone as far as assuming i have a certain personality based off of how I look. I know these judgements because I've been told about them by individuals who have pre-judged me. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
The pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. Prejudice can affect individuals in both positive and negative ways. Prejudice upon a person can lead them to start to believe in what they may be viewed as. It may change them as individuals, either by making them more confident or more self conscious. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice. Reflection #1 (posted RHS February 20 -- 171 February 22)
The process of this whole assignment has really helped me, in my opinion. Beginning with the Topic of Inquiry was kind of difficult for me to do, because i couldn't decide what topic to do and what subject i felt strongly enough to write about. I chose judgment. The topic of Inquiry helped me to look more deeply into Prejudice and then eventually be able to write a whole definition paper on the subject.
The Writing Partnership has made me view my writing in a little different way. Usually while I'm writing, i don't really think about what others view it as or what they may think or see in my writing, I more focus on getting my point out in the way that i want, and then i leave it at that. The partnership gave me a fresh pair of eyes and opinions and advice from a more experienced writer.
I have found this whole experience pretty helpful and refreshing in that fact that its a different type of learning. I think that it has helped me to grow in my writing.
Comments:
I was really able to see how this process worked for you as I looked at your multiple drafts, and it was great to see how your ideas and arguments came together over time (especially over such a short amount of time!). I hope my comments didn't change your writing in such a way that you weren't expressing what you wanted to - I'm hoping the fresh pair of eyes was mostly to give you an idea of whether or not what you were trying to say was coming across, and to ask questions that generated new ideas from you. I'm looking forward to seeing your next writing assignment! Rough Draft Comparison (posted RHS February 24 -- 171 February 26 )
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change in some societal prejudices, from years past, there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.
Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratoes themselves. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times, but to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future.
Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are evenjeopardized or not even given r chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job.
Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but some similar ways.
Comments: There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past[A1] , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society. Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society.[A2] . Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratoes themselves. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car.[A3] . For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works,[A4] But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future.Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are evenjeopardized or not even given r chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job.[A5] Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.[A6] .
I think looking at two different settings where prejudice occurs is a great start for a comparison paper. So far, I am seeing a lot more similarities mentioned than differences between the school and workplace. Bringing up more specific ways in which prejudice affects people in each of these settings would help you to point out some differences. For example, how might a student be treated if a teacher is prejudiced against them, and how is this different from how a worker might be treated if a boss displayed prejudice? I also think this gives you a great topic to bring in some outside sources, particularly in looking at prejudice in the workplace. There are many stats out there which can give you information about gender prejudice in the workplace, such as the ratio of men to women in particular jobs, and how the wage gap still has women getting paid less than men for the same job. Adding specific examples would really clarify the similarities and differences between the school and workplace in this paper. [A1]What kinds of changes? [A2]What might administrators do to prevent prejudice? What might prevent those measures from working? [A3]How/what might a person’s appearance suggest about their background or religion? [A4]How? Can you name specific kinds of people, and what being friends with them might suggest about a person? [A5]This paragraph seems like a great place to bring in some outside sources. Is there anything you can find regarding workplace equlity (such as ratios of men to women in certain professions) or information regarding the wage gap between men and women? Bringing up specific examples like these could add strength to the statement that it happens in the workplace, by pointing out exactly where and how it happens. [A6]Could you bring up a specific difference between prejudice in schools vs. prejudice in the workplace (either here in your closing paragraph or elsewhere in the paper)? Revision Comparison (posted RHS March 2 -- 171 March 4) There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society. Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not. Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways.
Comments: There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves[A1] Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred ideas on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in..[A2] Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. [A3] Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not[A4] . Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways. [A5]
It’s great to see you adding more details to this paper. The more information you can give to your reader, the clearer your argument will be. I’m particularly interested in the bit you added to your final paragraph, where you say “Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it’s promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, it’s almost as if everyone had to fend for themselves and are expected to know what’s prejudice and what’s not.” You seem to be arguing a key difference here, which I’m reading as saying that schools actually try to deal with the issue of prejudice, and end it, while workplaces accept it as something that will happen, and something they can do nothing about. This is a pretty big difference, and one I think it would be great if you could bring up earlier in the paper. If you could mention more how each setting deals with prejudice in the section about each, (how school deals with prejudice in the school section, and how work deals with it in the work section,) I think it would really help point out this difference. [A1]How might a student know that someone is prejudiced against them? How might another student or a teacher act, or what might they say, to indicate this? [A2]How might a prejudice affect a student’s future? [A3]Can you mention specific jobs that preference men or women? What job might a man be more likely to get? What job might a woman be more likely to get? [A4]I’m reading this as an argument that in schools, prejudice is viewed as an issue that administrators must address, and try to prevent, while in the workplace, people are expected to simply deal with prejudice. Could you mention these points in the paragraphs on school and work? [A5]How might a person handle prejudice in school, and how is it different from how a person would handle it in the workplace? Does the ability to handle prejudice come from experience? Would it be easier or harder to deal with it in the workplace over school, and why or why not? Final Comparison (posted RHS March 9 -- 171 March 11) There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves.Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred ideas on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with.Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in. Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not.Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways.
Comments: There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society. New paragraph here? Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves.Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. What kinds of clubs or cliques might a student be excluded from? What traits might lead to a student being excluded?Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred idea on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with.Could family prejudices include experiences with a student’s older sibling? How might an older sibling change how a teacher or administrator views a student?Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in. New paragraph here?Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. Is there a difference between someone not getting a job due to prejudice and someone not getting a job because they weren’t dressed appropriately at the interview? Could appearance-based prejudice be necessary to some degree for interviewers? It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. What traits are men assumed to have that make them get CEO jobs, and what traits are women assumed to have that get them nursing jobs? Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not. Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways.Whether it's by shrugging it off or fighting more for what you believe against the prejudice, we all handle that stereotypes in the ways that work best for us as individuals. What are the different ways in which people are expected to handle prejudice?
It was really good to see you trying to bring more examples into this paper (how cliques may exclude students, how administration may view a student’s friends as a reflection of that student, how men are more likely to get CEO jobs and women are more likely to get nursing jobs, etc.). The more details and specific examples (like these) that you can put into a paper, the stronger your argument will be (and your paper will be longer, too!). Thinking ahead and looking at the papers you’ve written, keep trying to mention a specific example for every general statement or argument you make (for example, pairing your statement “Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred ideas on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with,” with “If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works” offers the reader a concrete example of how a teacher or administrator might have a blurred idea based on a student’s friends). Don’t forget to proofread and run spell check before you turn in your final paper as well. I have one final comment not related to your paper-since we didn’t get a chance to talk last Wednesday I’ll mention it here. I am trying a new format for my response (putting my comments directly into the text, rather than as footnotes). If you could let me know (or mention in your reflection) whether this style of response is more helpful, or if you would rather me return to what I was doing, that would help me to make sure my comments are as helpful and easy to refer to as possible. Thanks!
EXTRA CREDIT: Revision After final Comparison Essay
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although it's claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society. Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a,"prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable. Though in the end, the students will form their own opinions and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves. Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. A girl may want to be a cheerleader, but other girls may not think she's "cool enough". A boy may want to join a sports team, but the other players may not think he has the rights skill based off of his looks. Teachers and administrators in some cases, already have a blurred idea on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with. Some teachers may have had previous encounters with a students sibling, and that could easily lead to prejudgment. It's easy to assume that people are no different than those they associate with. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance can tell them all they need to know about an individual ,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone practices the Amish religion and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools would be by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in. Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. Of course it seems fair to narrow down a list of potential employees based on if they were dressed appropriately, not by if it was stylish enough or a religions necessity. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. Men have a more powerful, get work done stereotype while women are stereotyped to be more nurturing. These traits place each sex into categories for jobs. Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not. Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways. Whether it's by shrugging it off or fighting more for what you believe against the prejudice, we all handle that stereotypes in the ways that work best for us as individuals.
Reflection #2 (RHS March 16 -- 171 March 25)
The purpose of my comparison essay was to show that there are similarities between Prejudice in every single aspect of the world. I tried to use examples of real events to show this statement to be true.
The intended audience of my essay was for those who feel as if prejudice is not an issue for everyone in society.
I felt like i wanted to write about the comparison of prejuidce in schools and then grown up adult work places because i feel as if it is important to put a stop to all prejdice at any age.
I feel as if my topic drws the attention of the audoence because it does apply to everyone at some point in their life.I tried to portray my tone as well as i could through the writing and my examples of howe i've negativly seen this happen, and prejuidces affects.
Amanda- Sorry i was not able to make it to the last couple of meetings at Drake. I really do appreciate your help though!
I liked so much better you putting in your comments at the place in the writing! that made i easier to follow! thank you!
Comments: The purpose of my comparison essay was to show that there are similarities between Prejudice in every single aspect of the world. I tried to use examples of real events to show this statement to be true. The intended audience of my essay was for those who feel as if prejudice is not an issue for everyone in society. It sounds like you were working toward an argument, or a persuasive essay, in addition to doing a comparison. I could definitely see an argument for the universality of prejudice by your final draft. I felt like i wanted to write about the comparison of prejuidce in schools and then grown up adult work places because i feel as if it is important to put a stop to all prejdice at any age.I feel as if my topic drws the attention of the audoence because it does apply to everyone at some point in their life.This is certainly an important point-it would have been interesting to see if you could work this into your paper somehow. I tried to portray my tone as well as i could through the writing and my examples of howe i've negativly seen this happen, and prejuidces affects. Amanda- Sorry i was not able to make it to the last couple of meetings at Drake. I really do appreciate your help though!I liked so much better you putting in your comments at the place in the writing! that made i easier to follow! thank you! I will continue to make comments this way instead. Thank you for letting me know! Rough Draft Argument (posted RHS April 6 -- 171 April 8)
Prejudice is a universal isue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the mallest of ways. While some people believe that our ociety has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel a if their i still so much to improve on.
Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument imply is that we have grown with time to the point where race i no longer a factor. But, that not true, Everyday, I witness some sort of racism. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there still is racism through comment made towards one and another, segregation of friend group, as well as in the workplaces.
Prejudice remains an obviou iue in two very important place. school and workplace are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. This play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that that is not the case.
While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change.
Comments: Prejudice is a universal isue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the mallest of ways. While some people believe that our ociety has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel a if their i still so much to improve on. The main argument I am seeing in this first paragraph is that prejudice is still an issue. Is this your main argument, or is there something else you are hoping to get across? Are you going to try to argue about prejudice as a whole, or will your argument focus on a sub-area (race, class, etc.). Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument imply is that we have grown with time to the point where race i no longer a factor. But, that not true,I am starting to see a more focused argument right here. If you are focusing on arguing that racism is still a problem today, it would be great to see you state that in your opening paragraph. Everyday, I witness some sort of racism. What sort of racism do you see?Is it directed at you, or someone you know? How does this make you feel? What can you do about it, and what do you hope others will do about it?Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, Do you want to mention all three of these issues, or are you focusing your paper just on race? It might be tricky to really address all three (as there is a lot of talk about for each). there still is racism through comment made towards one and another, segregation of friend group, as well as in the workplaces. I appreciate how this sentence seems to indicate what you will be talking about in your paper (providing examples of racial prejudice in each of these places). Could you possibly shift this and make it your final sentence for paragraph one? Adding an argument against racism (as that seems to be your argument) to this sentence would make it a strong thesis to open with. Prejudice remains an obviou iue in two very important place. school and workplace are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. What sorts of influences or biases might appear in school and work? How does this relate back to the issue of racism? This play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools. What about Affirmative Action? Is it a type of racism when someone is accepted to a school because they are a minority?Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that that is not the case. I would really like to see how the issue of racism appears in schools and work. More concrete examples would make your argument stronger. For example, you bring up what the opposing argument would say, but you don’t provide evidence after you say that their argument is wrong. While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. You end with a clear argument, which is great. I wish I could see more of that argument throughout the paper, instead of just at the end. What can people do to change prejudices? Is this paper meant to encourage everyone to stop prejudice, or is it specifically targeted at people who openly display prejudice and racism?
You have the makings of a great argument here. Your final sentence is the first time you really state what you are arguing (that prejudice needs to change) and it would be great if you could state that in your opening paragraph, and refer back to it throughout the paper. You mention that racism is still prevalent, and that you witness this, but I’d like more information. What sort of racism do you see, who is it against, and what is your reaction? Your argument will be stronger if you paint a picture of the situation in your readers’ minds (especially if you show them a really negative moment full of racism, followed by an argument that it should be stopped). The same goes for arguments about prejudice in school and work. If your focus is racism (which it appears it might be) you should show how racism occurs in school and work, and use that to explain why it should be stopped. Adding in details really help open up the argument you have started.
Revision Argument (posted RHS April 13 -- 171 April 15)
Prejudice is a universal isue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against. Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument imply is that we have grown with time to the point where race i no longer a factor. But, that not true,Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc.. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillis the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. Prejudice remains an obviou issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that is not the case. People are left out every single day dueTo judgments. While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change.
Comments: Prejudice is a universal issue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against. Much stronger argument in your first paragraph! I am glad to see you both addressing the areas of prejudice that you will discuss in the paper and making a clear statement of your argument in your last sentence.Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument simply is that we have grown with time to the point where race is no longer a factor.It’s good that you are bringing in what the opposition might say. What might make them think that race is no longer an issue? Is there a specific detail the opposition would use in an argument that you can bring up and prove wrong? But, that not true,Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. Can you offer a specific example or incident you have seen?People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc..How? What do people say to them? How are these people treated? Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillis the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. Prejudice remains an obviou issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs.Why might your opposition say this? Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school.Do you believe Affirmative Action is a good thing (since it is supposed to make up for prejudice and racism in the past) or do you think it is still a type of racism and should end? Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that is not the case. People are left out every single day dueTo judgments.While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. I was really glad to see you clearly state your argument in the first paragraph-that made it clear right away what you were going to be talking about, which was helpful to me as a reader. I see that you mention what your opposition might say a couple of times in this paper-could you think of a specific event, detail, etc. that the opposition might use in their argument? If you can, and you can prove that detail, event, etc. wrong, it will make what you are saying even more convincing. I am also interested in how Affirmative Action plays in to this argument-it is supposed to function as a way to make up for past prejudice, but some people see it as a new type of racism. I found myself wondering what you thought about it, and whether you would include it in a type of racism that should be changed.
Final Argument (posted RHS April 13-171 April 15)
Prejudice is a universal issue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice surrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against. Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument simply is that we have grown with time to the point where race is no longer a factor. It's the common misconception that because our world doesn't show the most stereotypical types of racism, such as the jim Crowe laws and lynching out of simple hatred, that we have grown past segregation and that it no longer exists. But, that is far from the truth. Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. I will never forget the time that I once heard someone say that they could never be friends with someone based off of the clothes that the other was wearing. How more cruel and prejudice can you get then that? People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc.. In the work place, it's not uncommon for the sex of the potential employee to play a factor in getting the job position. for example, It's statistically shown that men hold more jobs such as engineers and IT professionals while women occupy more jobs such as nurses, teachers and cleaners (Guardianco.com). These statistics are very stereotypical because men are thought to be more professional and capable of taking on more, while women are thought to be more of the care takers. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there still is the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. Prejudice remains an obvious issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice plays a part in each of these places is extremely disturbing. The opposing argument is the idea that prejudiceness does not play a role in the school systems and workplaces and jobs. That sort of thinking is simply ignorant and frustrating. Just because it's not as obvious as in the past, it's ridiculous for anyone to think that the way individuals are treated differently now based off of differences is okay. It is not okay, it's prejudice. plain and simple. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school. In reality, if you really look at what affirative action is doing, it's a form of prejudice and racism as well. Affirmative action is used as a type of system to make up for prejudice and racism in the past. Shoudn't we be practicing equality all around? ISn't picking the minority automatically over the majority prejudice? That's not equality. Everyone is equal. We all should be treated that way, whether black, white, pink, blue, tall, short, stylish or not. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it is obvious that is not the case, and it's extremely disheartening. People are left out every single day due to judgments.While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is much to improve in.I totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about someone before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. Everyone is equal, and it's important for everyone to realize we still have far to go and to fight for it.
Comments: Prejudice is a universal issue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice surrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. It might help to mention race and gender as well as clothing and opinions here, because you do talk about race and gender later in your paper. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against. Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument simply is that we have grown with time to the point where race is no longer a factor. It's the common misconception that because our world doesn't show the most stereotypical types of racism, such as the jim Crowe laws and lynching out of simple hatred, that we have grown past segregation and that it no longer exists. But, that is far from the truth. Right here would be a good place to talk about some sort of racial prejudice that still exists (and it might be a good place for your talk about affirmative action). Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. I will never forget the time that I once heard someone say that they could never be friends with someone based off of the clothes that the other was wearing.This is a good example of appearance-based prejudice that you have seen. However, it might help to mention some sort of racial prejudice before this example, because you switch a bit quickly from talking about segregation and racial prejudice to talking about the appearance-based prejudice you have seen. How more cruel and prejudice can you get then that? People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc.. In the work place, it's not uncommon for the sex of the potential employee to play a factor in getting the job position. for example, It's statistically shown that men hold more jobs such as engineers and IT professionals while women occupy more jobs such as nurses, teachers and cleaners (Guardianco.com). Great! I am glad to see you bringing in an outside source to strengthen your argument. These statistics are very stereotypical because men are thought to be more professional and capable of taking on more, while women are thought to be more of the care takers. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, this seems a bit repetitive-is there another way you can say this? there still is the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. I wonder if the person observation of prejudice that you mention earlier might fit better right here, when you mention prejudice based on clothing. Prejudice remains an obvious issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice plays a part in each of these places is extremely disturbing. The opposing argument is the idea that prejudiceness does not play a role in the school systems and workplaces and jobs. That sort of thinking is simply ignorant and frustrating. Just because it's not as obvious as in the past, it's ridiculous for anyone to think that the way individuals are treated differently now based off of differences is okay. It is not okay, it's prejudice. plain and simple. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school. In reality, if you really look at what affirative action is doing, it's a form of prejudice and racism as well. Affirmative action is used as a type of system to make up for prejudice and racism in the past. Shoudn't we be practicing equality all around? ISn't picking the minority automatically over the majority prejudice?Asking your audience a question like this is a great way to make your argument stronger, because you are asking them to think about it by questioning them. That's not equality. Everyone is equal. We all should be treated that way, whether black, white, pink, blue, tall, short, stylish or not. I enjoyed this summation of your argument. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it is obvious that is not the case, and it's extremely disheartening. People are left out every single day due to judgments.While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is much to improve in.I totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about someone before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. Everyone is equal, and it's important for everyone to realize we still have far to go and to fight for it. Nice! This ending not only restates your argument, it also encourages your audience to go out and make a change.
This paper is looking great! I enjoyed seeing the outside source brought in while talking about gender stereotypes in the workplace. There are a couple places where I think it would make more sense to switch the order of your arguments (talking about affirmative action after you mention segregation/racial prejudice, and giving your personal experience after you talk about appearance-based prejudice would help your arguments and your examples relate to each other, making the paper stronger). Don’t forget to run spell check at the very end to catch the typos!
Reflection #3 (posted RHS April 23)
After going through this whole process of writing about prejudjce, I've learNed so much. I know that it has made me a stronger writer. It's made me looked farther and deeper into my subject and elaborate more than I would ever in one paper. The argument paper for me was basically a summary of everything I had written on thei subject the past semester. It allowed me to tie everything together and it made me realize in the end the importance of researching the subjects you write about. My writing partner had helped me so much throughout the whole process and I appreciate you do much thank you! Overall it had helped me grow as a writer and the argument essay allowed me to sum up all I had left to say about prejudice and the world today. Comments: After going through this whole process of writing about prejudjce, I've learNed so much. I know that it has made me a stronger writer. It's made me looked farther and deeper into my subject and elaborate more than I would ever in one paper. I’m glad to see this in your reflection! Really elaborating and providing details is a huge part of writing, so it’s great to know that this experience has helped solidify that importance for you. The argument paper for me was basically a summary of everything I had written on thei subject the past semester. It allowed me to tie everything together and it made me realize in the end the importance of researching the subjects you write about. I hope you were able to find a lot of connections while tying everything to together, and that you learned something new from your research. My writing partner had helped me so much throughout the whole process and I appreciate you do much thank you! That’s great to hear! I’m glad my comments were helpful to you, and I appreciate your letting me work with you. I’ve learned just as much as you through this collaboration, and I hope that my comments have improved over the semester just as much as your writing has! Overall it had helped me grow as a writer and the argument essay allowed me to sum up all I had left to say about prejudice and the world today.
Hi, my name is Anna Evans. I am a junior at Roosevelt High School. Some things you should know about me as a person are that my family and friends are very important to me. Along with family and friends, religion and succeeding in the best ways that I can are very important in my life and in forMing the person I am today. The goals right now in my life are to get good grades and be the best in everything I do.
This year, I am not involved in any sports but I am involved in the Varsity Show Choir through Roosevelt High School. In my opinion it is very important to keep yourself involved in some sort of activity. Not only to keep yourself well rounded and occupied, but also gives opportunities to meet others you may not normally get to know.
This semester in A.P. Lang, I am hoping to gain many different characteristics as a writer. I would like to learn how to make my writinas flow more easily, use bigger more intelligent sounding vocabulary, along with knowing where to correctly place the words, and just overall have a strong, sturdy way of writing that will produce accomplished pieces of writing, As a writer so far, my biggest challenges have been finding the correct topics that will keep the readers attention, along with using intelligent vocabulary and diction.
I am excited to work together and I am looking forward to hearing everything you have to say to help improve my writing.
Thank you!!
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Hello Anna! My name is Amanda Bellis, and I am a senior English major at Drake. My future plans at this moment include going to graduate school for a master’s in Library Science, after which I hope to become a youth services librarian, eventually working my way to a position as a library director. My plans and goals have changed several times, however (I have changed my major 3 times), and I would like to gain experience with the teaching side of writing in the event that I work in academia or in a school-library setting, which is why I am taking this course. As a bit of background, I am a Des Moines native, and I graduated from East High School in addition to going through the Central Academy program, where I took all of my English courses. As a result, I consider myself to be well-grounded in the art of writing, from the side of the writer. Other than occasionally helping my friends with papers, however, I have little experience with writing from an educator’s standpoint, so I hope that working with you will not only be beneficial to you as a student (which I hope it will be!) but also helpful to me, both as a student by helping me to see my assignments from the professor’s viewpoint, and as someone hoping to work with young people in the future by helping me grasp how best to help them. I’m excited to have the chance to work with you, and I cannot wait to get started!
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Personal Reflection on Topic of Inquiry(posted RHS January 27 -- 171 January 29)
Prejudgment is everywhere. We may try and deny and say that we don't do it personally ourselves, but that's not true. At some point in everyone's life weDave all been guilty of passing unjustified judgments. Whether it's because of someone's clothing, someones hair, where they live, what they drive or where theyre from; people will always find themselves looking at others with the idea that they already know what the other is like.
I admit, I've been a continuous offender of this prejudging habit. I have done it without thinking, and sometimes even without noticing. It branches off of stereotypes. Society in my opinion has done such a good job at grouping people together into divided,specific groups bed upon appearance, thoughts and class. That's not how it should be, but thats how many of us have been trained to think, including myself at times.
I feel myself changing a little bit when it comes to this. My perspective has been changed greatly because of my own personal experiences I have gone through. I've been prejudged in many ways. I'm sure in ways I have no idea about. But there is one way I know, and it's the judgement of how,"nothing could be wrong in my life." How I have everything I could ask for.
Well yes, I've been blessed with a wonderful, privileged life with great true friends and an inseparable family. But there are deeper issues in my life that only few people know about. Life has been hard. There have been events that have happened that have haunted the members of my family every single day. Experiences that no one could even begin to try and understand without actually living.
I cringe when people tell me that I havent experienced struggles in my life or that my family is perfect. I want to shout at them, "If you only knew!!!!". But in the end, really what I've learned through it all, has been that no one knows anything. Everyone may think they have it all figured out. Everyone may think that there's nothing other than what is seen on the surface. But I've learned that there is no perfect life and everyone has their own personal issues and problems, whatever they might be. So that leads me to my question, why do we prejudge and stereotype?
Comments:
Prejudgment is everywhere. We may try and deny and say that we don't do it personally ourselves, but that's not true. At some point in everyone's life weDave all been guilty of passing unjustified judgments[A1] . Whether it's because of someone's clothing, someones hair, where they live, what they drive or where theyre from; people will always find themselves looking at others with the idea that they already know what the other is like.I admit, I've been a continuous offender of this prejudging habit. I have done it without thinking, and sometimes even without noticing. It branches off of stereotypes. Society in my opinion has done such a good job at grouping people together into divided,specific groups bed upon appearance, thoughts and class[A2] . That's not how it should be, but thats how many of us have been trained[A3] to think, including myself at times.I feel myself changing a little bit when it comes to this. My perspective has been changed greatly because of my own personal experiences I have gone through. I've been prejudged in many ways[A4] . I'm sure in ways I have no idea about. But there is one way I know, and it's the judgement of how,"nothing could be wrong in my life." How I have everything I could ask for.Well yes, I've been blessed with a wonderful, privileged life with great true friends and an inseparable family. But there are deeper issues in my life that only few people know about. Life has been hard. There have been events that have happened that have haunted the members of my family every single day. Experiences that no one could even begin to try and understand without actually living[A5] .I cringe when people tell me that I havent experienced struggles in my life or that my family is perfect. I want to shout at them, "If you only knew!!!!". But in the end, really what I've learned through it all, has been that no one knows anything. Everyone may think they have it all figured out. Everyone may think that there's nothing other than what is seen on the surface. But I've learned that there is no perfect life and everyone has their own personal issues and problems, whatever they might be. So that leads me to my question, why do we prejudge and stereotype[A6] ?
[A1]Have you done this? What was the situation?
[A2]What does society think about these groups? What do you think?
[A3]This is a fascinating idea-is it society that is training us, or something else? How does the training happen?
[A4]You list one example below, but are there other ways that you know of besides your main example?
[A5]It sounds like this could be something really personal, but is it something you could share (even if you only share part of it)? I find myself wanting to really see the contrast between the person who appears happy, and the person who is struggling with something that people can’t see.
[A6]Big question! Did any thoughts or opinions about this develop while you were writing this paper?
You’ve tackled quite an issue with stereotypes and prejudice, and I commend you for it! You’ve certainly got a grasp on the place these issues have in society. I did find myself wondering a bit about the place they hold in your life. You do mention a perception that people have of you which is incorrect, but I found myself wondering how that affects you on a daily basis, and exactly how the real you differs from the you that everyone perceives. I think you have a solid framework on the issues here-it just needs a little more “you.” Don’t be afraid of that!
Rough Draft Definition (posted RHS February 3 -- 171 February 5)
Predjudice Rough Draft-
Prejudice is everywhere. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance has become upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized. The most stereotypical prejudice that is recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion hat is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, is the fact that everyone is an individual, everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
Comments:
Prejudice is everywhere. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience [A1] , takes part in forming everyone as individuals."First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street[A2] . Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance has become upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized[A3] . The most stereotypical prejudice that is recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have[A4] . Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion hat is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, is the fact that everyone is an individual, everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
You’ve got a great framework of ideas started here. I commented above on what I read as your definition of prejudice, and I noticed several expansions on that definition in the following paragraphs. You certainly offered details as to the ways in which prejudice manifests itself, which I thought helped in defining it. I did find myself wondering, however, if you have any examples which you could offer regarding the types of prejudice you mention (either something from your own life, or something you’ve seen or read) which could provide your reader with a mental image of what you’re talking about.
[A1]I am reading this part of the sentence as your definition of prejudice. Is there a way that you can make your definition easier to pick out?
[A2]You offer several areas of appearance that may be judged in this section. Are there specific types of cars or clothing that are associated with specific assumptions? What are they?
[A3]How?
[A4]You’ve mentioned several ways in which people are judged, and I see the connection to your reflection paper with this topic. Is there a way to connect the two? Do you have any personal experiences regarding prejudice that you could bring to this paper to strengthen your arguments?
Revision Definition (posted RHS February 10 -- 171 February 12 )
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, Prejudice is stated as, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience. This takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as put together or driving an expensive car such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
Comments:
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, Prejudice is stated as, thepre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience. This takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everyhting." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are closed minded enough, thats all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the others whole life story. Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as put together or driving an expensive car such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society.[A1] Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in[A2] . No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
Whether positively or negatively, the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals[A3] . People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
This is looking great! I could clearly see your definition, and I appreciated how the paper expanded upon that by providing examples of preconceived ideas. Try running spell-check and reading your paper aloud to check for errors before you turn in the final draft (it’s best to wait until the end when you know you won’t change something you’ve fixed).
[A1]This looks like you’re introducing a new idea.-would it help to separate it in a new paragraph?
[A2]Any specific inferences come to mind?
[A3]How might a prejudice affect or change someone?
Final Definition (posted RHS February 17 -- 171 February 19 )then
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, "Prejudice is stated as,the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience"(Dictionary.com). This takes part in forming everyone as individuals.
"First Impressions are everything." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are close minded enough, that's all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the other's whole life story.Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as "put-together", or if they're driving an expensive cars such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. Some have inferred that my life my not have struggle based upon the family life that they may view me having, some have even gone as far as assuming i have a certain personality based off of how I look. I know these judgements, because I've been told about them by individuals who have pre-judged me. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
The pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals, can affect individuals in both positive and negative ways. Prejudice upon a person can lead them to start to believe in what they may be viewed as. It may change them as individuals, either by making them more confident or more self conscious. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
Comments:
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them or their story. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their apperance, their opinions and also their class. According to Dicitionary.com, "Prejudice is stated as,the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience"(Dictionary.com[A1] ). This takes part in forming everyone as individuals[A2] .
"First Impressions are everything." That famous saying is true. But, to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are close minded enough, that's all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Apperance is everything to some people. They think that one look is all it takes to know the other's whole life story.Well, that is not true. That is where the prejudice comes in. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as "put-together", or if they're driving an expensive cars such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. [A3] Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just like apperance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class is the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on hat they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. Some have inferred that my life my not have struggle based upon the family life that they may view me having, some have even gone as far as assuming i have a certain personality based off of how I look[A4] . I know these judgements, because I've been told about them by individuals who have pre-judged me. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
The pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals, can affect individuals in both positive and negative ways. Prejudice upon a person can lead them to start to believe in what they may be viewed as. It may change them as individuals, either by making them more confident or more self conscious[A5] . People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
This paper has a come a long way from the first draft, and I really enjoyed seeing arguments begin to develop. You have a great argument in your last paragraph, when you say that people sometimes change into the prejudices against them. It would be great if you could introduce that argument earlier in the paper, and use the examples of prejudice you have to show how a person might be changed by them. There are still a few spelling errors (F7 in Microsoft Word will run through those for you). You’ve got a solid definition here, and a great start at an argument to go with it.
[A1]If you site Dictionary.com in parentheses, you don’t have to refer to it within the sentence too.
[A2]Could you bring in the argument from the last paragraph here? Is there a way to add to this sentence what you say later about people changing to reflect the prejudices against them?
[A3]This seems to go along with the argument you make in your final paragraph. Is there a way to connect the two? Maybe try making the argument earlier and tying it to the types of prejudice you mention? How might a person’s behavior or attitude change if someone constantly has the same prejudice against them? How might a prejudice change by how people try to portray themselves?
[A4]I appreciated seeing how this affected you personally here. It helps illustrate how universal prejudice is.
[A5]Here is where I start to see an argument along with your definition. Is there a way you can incorporate this idea into the rest of the paper?
EXTRA CREDIT: Revision after Final Draft Of Definition Essay
Prejudice surrounds our world. We all are guilty of it at some point. It would be a lie if a person claimed they havent passed a judgment upon someone without even knowing them. People are mostly judged and grouped together based upon their appearance, opinions and also their social class. "Prejudice is stated as the pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience"(Dictionary.com). This takes part in forming everyone as individuals. Often, the prejudices put upon someone shapes them into that persona because of the continual grouping. They begin to believe what they're told and fall into that prejudice.
"First Impressions are everything." That famous saying remains true. But to alot of people, all their first impression of someone is their apperance. For those who are close minded enough, that's all they need to see in order to have an opinion about them. Appearance means everything to some people. They think that one look tells the other's whole life story.Well, that is not true. Prejudice comes into play here. People are consistantly judged by what they look like. People are grouped by how pretty they may or may not be, expected to act a certain way or have a certain amount of money based on their clothing or even be called names because of the kind of car a person may drive down the street. For example, if a person wears professional looking clothing and appears as "put-together", or if they're driving an expensive cars such as a Mercedes or BMW, the inference may be that they have money and lead a successful life. In some cases, that may just be a portrayal the individual wants to give off. Apperance means alot in todays society. Because of the impact and importance apperance plays upon people and their opinions about others, it has turned into a type of prejudice.
A person's class has become a big factor of prejudice in today's society. Just as appearance, a person's social class can be sometimes immediately recognized . The most stereotypical prejudice recognized according to class would be the idea that the more wealthier you are, the more stuck-up you'll be, or the the more wealthier you are, the more happier you will be and the less problems you'll have. Just like the opposite for those less fortunate. But that is far from the truth. A person's social status and class has no definite factor on determining the person's personality. I have personally experienced this type of prejudice in my life. Being judged by others on what they think i am, based off my dad's job or the neighborhood i've lived in. Many inferences have been made based off of the "class" I've been pre-placed in. Some have inferred that my life may not have struggle based upon the family life that they may view me having, some have even gone as far as assuming i have a certain personality based off of how I look. I know these judgements because I've been told about them by individuals who have pre-judged me. No one should be expected to have a specific thought process or personality based upon their job, where they live or the money they may or may not have.
The pre-concieved opinion that is not based off of reasoning or experience, takes part in forming everyone as individuals. Prejudice can affect individuals in both positive and negative ways. Prejudice upon a person can lead them to start to believe in what they may be viewed as. It may change them as individuals, either by making them more confident or more self conscious. People are judged and placed in specific groups based upon their apperance, class and opinions. Those who stereotype and are guilty of prejudice think that everyone falls into one specific group classified by styles, apperance, jobs, everything. But what those who are prejudice are missing, would be the fact that everyone is an individual. Everyone has a story and no one will ever be able to see that if they stereotype and are prejudice.
Reflection #1 (posted RHS February 20 -- 171 February 22)
The process of this whole assignment has really helped me, in my opinion. Beginning with the Topic of Inquiry was kind of difficult for me to do, because i couldn't decide what topic to do and what subject i felt strongly enough to write about. I chose judgment. The topic of Inquiry helped me to look more deeply into Prejudice and then eventually be able to write a whole definition paper on the subject.
The Writing Partnership has made me view my writing in a little different way. Usually while I'm writing, i don't really think about what others view it as or what they may think or see in my writing, I more focus on getting my point out in the way that i want, and then i leave it at that. The partnership gave me a fresh pair of eyes and opinions and advice from a more experienced writer.
I have found this whole experience pretty helpful and refreshing in that fact that its a different type of learning. I think that it has helped me to grow in my writing.
Comments:
I was really able to see how this process worked for you as I looked at your multiple drafts, and it was great to see how your ideas and arguments came together over time (especially over such a short amount of time!). I hope my comments didn't change your writing in such a way that you weren't expressing what you wanted to - I'm hoping the fresh pair of eyes was mostly to give you an idea of whether or not what you were trying to say was coming across, and to ask questions that generated new ideas from you. I'm looking forward to seeing your next writing assignment!
Rough Draft Comparison (posted RHS February 24 -- 171 February 26 )
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change in some societal prejudices, from years past, there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.
Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratoes themselves. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times, but to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future.
Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are evenjeopardized or not even given r chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job.
Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but some similar ways.
Comments:
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past[A1] , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society. Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society.[A2] . Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratoes themselves. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car.[A3] . For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works, [A4] But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future.Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are evenjeopardized or not even given r chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job.[A5] Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.[A6] .
I think looking at two different settings where prejudice occurs is a great start for a comparison paper. So far, I am seeing a lot more similarities mentioned than differences between the school and workplace. Bringing up more specific ways in which prejudice affects people in each of these settings would help you to point out some differences. For example, how might a student be treated if a teacher is prejudiced against them, and how is this different from how a worker might be treated if a boss displayed prejudice? I also think this gives you a great topic to bring in some outside sources, particularly in looking at prejudice in the workplace. There are many stats out there which can give you information about gender prejudice in the workplace, such as the ratio of men to women in particular jobs, and how the wage gap still has women getting paid less than men for the same job. Adding specific examples would really clarify the similarities and differences between the school and workplace in this paper.
[A1]What kinds of changes?
[A2]What might administrators do to prevent prejudice? What might prevent those measures from working?
[A3]How/what might a person’s appearance suggest about their background or religion?
[A4]How? Can you name specific kinds of people, and what being friends with them might suggest about a person?
[A5]This paragraph seems like a great place to bring in some outside sources. Is there anything you can find regarding workplace equlity (such as ratios of men to women in certain professions) or information regarding the wage gap between men and women? Bringing up specific examples like these could add strength to the statement that it happens in the workplace, by pointing out exactly where and how it happens.
[A6]Could you bring up a specific difference between prejudice in schools vs. prejudice in the workplace (either here in your closing paragraph or elsewhere in the paper)?
Revision Comparison (posted RHS March 2 -- 171 March 4)
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.
Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future.
Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job.
Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not. Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways.
Comments:
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves[A1] Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred ideas on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in.. [A2] Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. [A3] Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not[A4] . Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways. [A5]
It’s great to see you adding more details to this paper. The more information you can give to your reader, the clearer your argument will be. I’m particularly interested in the bit you added to your final paragraph, where you say “Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it’s promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, it’s almost as if everyone had to fend for themselves and are expected to know what’s prejudice and what’s not.” You seem to be arguing a key difference here, which I’m reading as saying that schools actually try to deal with the issue of prejudice, and end it, while workplaces accept it as something that will happen, and something they can do nothing about. This is a pretty big difference, and one I think it would be great if you could bring up earlier in the paper. If you could mention more how each setting deals with prejudice in the section about each, (how school deals with prejudice in the school section, and how work deals with it in the work section,) I think it would really help point out this difference.
[A1]How might a student know that someone is prejudiced against them? How might another student or a teacher act, or what might they say, to indicate this?
[A2]How might a prejudice affect a student’s future?
[A3]Can you mention specific jobs that preference men or women? What job might a man be more likely to get? What job might a woman be more likely to get?
[A4]I’m reading this as an argument that in schools, prejudice is viewed as an issue that administrators must address, and try to prevent, while in the workplace, people are expected to simply deal with prejudice. Could you mention these points in the paragraphs on school and work?
[A5]How might a person handle prejudice in school, and how is it different from how a person would handle it in the workplace? Does the ability to handle prejudice come from experience? Would it be easier or harder to deal with it in the workplace over school, and why or why not?
Final Comparison (posted RHS March 9 -- 171 March 11)
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves.Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred ideas on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with.Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in. Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not.Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways.
Comments:
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices, from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although its claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society. New paragraph here? Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a "prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys, or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable, but in the end, the students will form their own opinions, and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves.Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. What kinds of clubs or cliques might a student be excluded from? What traits might lead to a student being excluded?Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred idea on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with. Could family prejudices include experiences with a student’s older sibling? How might an older sibling change how a teacher or administrator views a student?Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance Can tell them all they need to know about an indivIdual,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions, and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone is Amish and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools is by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in. New paragraph here?Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. Is there a difference between someone not getting a job due to prejudice and someone not getting a job because they weren’t dressed appropriately at the interview? Could appearance-based prejudice be necessary to some degree for interviewers? It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. What traits are men assumed to have that make them get CEO jobs, and what traits are women assumed to have that get them nursing jobs? Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not. Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways.Whether it's by shrugging it off or fighting more for what you believe against the prejudice, we all handle that stereotypes in the ways that work best for us as individuals. What are the different ways in which people are expected to handle prejudice?
It was really good to see you trying to bring more examples into this paper (how cliques may exclude students, how administration may view a student’s friends as a reflection of that student, how men are more likely to get CEO jobs and women are more likely to get nursing jobs, etc.). The more details and specific examples (like these) that you can put into a paper, the stronger your argument will be (and your paper will be longer, too!). Thinking ahead and looking at the papers you’ve written, keep trying to mention a specific example for every general statement or argument you make (for example, pairing your statement “Teachers and administrators in some cases already have a blurred ideas on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with,” with “If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works” offers the reader a concrete example of how a teacher or administrator might have a blurred idea based on a student’s friends). Don’t forget to proofread and run spell check before you turn in your final paper as well.
I have one final comment not related to your paper-since we didn’t get a chance to talk last Wednesday I’ll mention it here. I am trying a new format for my response (putting my comments directly into the text, rather than as footnotes). If you could let me know (or mention in your reflection) whether this style of response is more helpful, or if you would rather me return to what I was doing, that would help me to make sure my comments are as helpful and easy to refer to as possible. Thanks!
EXTRA CREDIT: Revision After final Comparison Essay
There are many different levels of prejudice in our society. Although there has been a significant change of some societal prejudices from years past , there still are some underlying judgements and decisions made based on prejudices that are made. In my opinion, some obvious places prejudice affects how things go, is in schools and in the workplace. Although it's claimed prejudice has no impact on either of these places, it's undeniable that the role of prejudice does play a part in our society.
Schools claim to try their hardest to make a safe and judgement free environment for students to attend. No matter what the administration may try to do to maintain a,"prejudice free environment", that's just impossible. They may try to reach the students through asssemblys or forming new clubs to spread the word of how prejudice is not acceptable. Though in the end, the students will form their own opinions and prejudice will always somehow be apart of the society. Students are judged by other students as well as in some cases, teachers or administratons themselves. Individuals are excluded from certain clique groups, clubs or activities in school because of judgments that may already be passed. A girl may want to be a cheerleader, but other girls may not think she's "cool enough". A boy may want to join a sports team, but the other players may not think he has the rights skill based off of his looks. Teachers and administrators in some cases, already have a blurred idea on how certain students may be because of they're clothing or the family they come from and friends they associate with. Some teachers may have had previous encounters with a students sibling, and that could easily lead to prejudgment. It's easy to assume that people are no different than those they associate with. Appearance and association with other individuals seems to be the two most common factors of prejudice in schools. For those who feel that appearance can tell them all they need to know about an individual ,they are guilty of prejudging each other. Everyone comes from different backgrounds, have different religions and different stories. Appearance is an example of each of these aspects and shows individuality. For example, if someone practices the Amish religion and is seen wearing the traditional amish clothing, people seem shocked to seem them out in public at a popular local store or driving a car. For some people, all they see is appearance and judge based on that. Another way students are judged in schools would be by the people they hang out with or talk to. Yes, a persons choice of friends can be a reflection on them individually at times. If the people who an individual is involved with are known to be bad news, the individual associated with them will automatically be percieved as bad news as well. That's just how guilt by association and prejudice works. But to totally be judged based upon others seems unfair. In school, if you associate with one person or a group, sometimes that leads to judgements made by both other students and teachers. This kind of prejudice can really affect students and their future. The students can start to believe in the way they are being judged.it can bring the,m down and cause them to fall into the category theyre being placed in.
Prejudice isn't just an issue involving students in schools but also prejudice has followed individuals all the way up to their workplaces. The same kind of judgments are made in schools as those made in the workplace of adults, but on a higher more serious level. Some jobs are even jeopardized or not even given a chance based upon the judgments of clothing, appearance, and even the sex of the individual. Of course it seems fair to narrow down a list of potential employees based on if they were dressed appropriately, not by if it was stylish enough or a religions necessity. It's not rare for the individual to be passed up on a job based upon their social status, clothing, religion, and in some cases for men to be pIcked over women, or women over men based on their job, just because of their sex and the stereotypical standards of the job. for example, a man is more stereotypically likely to get a high end ceo business job over a woman, while a woman is more likely to be picked for a nursing position. Men have a more powerful, get work done stereotype while women are stereotyped to be more nurturing. These traits place each sex into categories for jobs. Although its claimed that prejudice has no impact in either school or work situations, it's undeniable that prejudice does play a role in our society. Whether it has to do with friends, grades, work or sex, Prejudice affects all aspects of life,just in different but relevant ways, at all stages of life.Prejudice in schools and in The work life are different of course in some ways too, such as the idea that if there is prejudice in schools, it's promoted more and looked down upon more by the administration and school leaders. Once in the adult, working world, its almost as if everyone has to fend for themselves and are expected to know what's prejudice and what's not. Prejudice surrounds the world and in each stage of our lives we are all expected to handle it in different ways. Whether it's by shrugging it off or fighting more for what you believe against the prejudice, we all handle that stereotypes in the ways that work best for us as individuals.
Reflection #2 (RHS March 16 -- 171 March 25)
The purpose of my comparison essay was to show that there are similarities between Prejudice in every single aspect of the world. I tried to use examples of real events to show this statement to be true.
The intended audience of my essay was for those who feel as if prejudice is not an issue for everyone in society.
I felt like i wanted to write about the comparison of prejuidce in schools and then grown up adult work places because i feel as if it is important to put a stop to all prejdice at any age.
I feel as if my topic drws the attention of the audoence because it does apply to everyone at some point in their life.I tried to portray my tone as well as i could through the writing and my examples of howe i've negativly seen this happen, and prejuidces affects.
Amanda- Sorry i was not able to make it to the last couple of meetings at Drake. I really do appreciate your help though!
I liked so much better you putting in your comments at the place in the writing! that made i easier to follow! thank you!
Comments:
The purpose of my comparison essay was to show that there are similarities between Prejudice in every single aspect of the world. I tried to use examples of real events to show this statement to be true. The intended audience of my essay was for those who feel as if prejudice is not an issue for everyone in society. It sounds like you were working toward an argument, or a persuasive essay, in addition to doing a comparison. I could definitely see an argument for the universality of prejudice by your final draft. I felt like i wanted to write about the comparison of prejuidce in schools and then grown up adult work places because i feel as if it is important to put a stop to all prejdice at any age.I feel as if my topic drws the attention of the audoence because it does apply to everyone at some point in their life.This is certainly an important point-it would have been interesting to see if you could work this into your paper somehow. I tried to portray my tone as well as i could through the writing and my examples of howe i've negativly seen this happen, and prejuidces affects. Amanda- Sorry i was not able to make it to the last couple of meetings at Drake. I really do appreciate your help though!I liked so much better you putting in your comments at the place in the writing! that made i easier to follow! thank you! I will continue to make comments this way instead. Thank you for letting me know!
Rough Draft Argument (posted RHS April 6 -- 171 April 8)
Prejudice is a universal isue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the mallest of ways. While some people believe that our ociety has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel a if their i still so much to improve on.
Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument imply is that we have grown with time to the point where race i no longer a factor. But, that not true, Everyday, I witness some sort of racism. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there still is racism through comment made towards one and another, segregation of friend group, as well as in the workplaces.
Prejudice remains an obviou iue in two very important place. school and workplace are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. This play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that that is not the case.
While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change.
Comments:
Prejudice is a universal isue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the mallest of ways. While some people believe that our ociety has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel a if their i still so much to improve on. The main argument I am seeing in this first paragraph is that prejudice is still an issue. Is this your main argument, or is there something else you are hoping to get across? Are you going to try to argue about prejudice as a whole, or will your argument focus on a sub-area (race, class, etc.).
Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument imply is that we have grown with time to the point where race i no longer a factor. But, that not true,I am starting to see a more focused argument right here. If you are focusing on arguing that racism is still a problem today, it would be great to see you state that in your opening paragraph. Everyday, I witness some sort of racism. What sort of racism do you see?Is it directed at you, or someone you know? How does this make you feel? What can you do about it, and what do you hope others will do about it?Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, Do you want to mention all three of these issues, or are you focusing your paper just on race? It might be tricky to really address all three (as there is a lot of talk about for each). there still is racism through comment made towards one and another, segregation of friend group, as well as in the workplaces. I appreciate how this sentence seems to indicate what you will be talking about in your paper (providing examples of racial prejudice in each of these places). Could you possibly shift this and make it your final sentence for paragraph one? Adding an argument against racism (as that seems to be your argument) to this sentence would make it a strong thesis to open with. Prejudice remains an obviou iue in two very important place. school and workplace are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. What sorts of influences or biases might appear in school and work? How does this relate back to the issue of racism? This play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools. What about Affirmative Action? Is it a type of racism when someone is accepted to a school because they are a minority?Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that that is not the case. I would really like to see how the issue of racism appears in schools and work. More concrete examples would make your argument stronger. For example, you bring up what the opposing argument would say, but you don’t provide evidence after you say that their argument is wrong.
While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. You end with a clear argument, which is great. I wish I could see more of that argument throughout the paper, instead of just at the end. What can people do to change prejudices? Is this paper meant to encourage everyone to stop prejudice, or is it specifically targeted at people who openly display prejudice and racism?
You have the makings of a great argument here. Your final sentence is the first time you really state what you are arguing (that prejudice needs to change) and it would be great if you could state that in your opening paragraph, and refer back to it throughout the paper. You mention that racism is still prevalent, and that you witness this, but I’d like more information. What sort of racism do you see, who is it against, and what is your reaction? Your argument will be stronger if you paint a picture of the situation in your readers’ minds (especially if you show them a really negative moment full of racism, followed by an argument that it should be stopped). The same goes for arguments about prejudice in school and work. If your focus is racism (which it appears it might be) you should show how racism occurs in school and work, and use that to explain why it should be stopped. Adding in details really help open up the argument you have started.
Revision Argument (posted RHS April 13 -- 171 April 15)
Prejudice is a universal isue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against.
Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument imply is that we have grown with time to the point where race i no longer a factor. But, that not true,Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc.. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillis the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. Prejudice remains an obviou issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that is not the case. People are left out every single day dueTo judgments.
While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change.
Comments:
Prejudice is a universal issue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice urrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against. Much stronger argument in your first paragraph! I am glad to see you both addressing the areas of prejudice that you will discuss in the paper and making a clear statement of your argument in your last sentence.Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument simply is that we have grown with time to the point where race is no longer a factor.It’s good that you are bringing in what the opposition might say. What might make them think that race is no longer an issue? Is there a specific detail the opposition would use in an argument that you can bring up and prove wrong? But, that not true,Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. Can you offer a specific example or incident you have seen?People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc..How? What do people say to them? How are these people treated? Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillis the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. Prejudice remains an obviou issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice play a part in each of these places is diturbing. The oppoing argument is the idea that prejudicenes does not play a role in the school ystems and workplaces and jobs.Why might your opposition say this? Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school.Do you believe Affirmative Action is a good thing (since it is supposed to make up for prejudice and racism in the past) or do you think it is still a type of racism and should end? Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it i obvioiu that is not the case. People are left out every single day dueTo judgments.While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is not much to improve in. i totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about one one before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change.
I was really glad to see you clearly state your argument in the first paragraph-that made it clear right away what you were going to be talking about, which was helpful to me as a reader. I see that you mention what your opposition might say a couple of times in this paper-could you think of a specific event, detail, etc. that the opposition might use in their argument? If you can, and you can prove that detail, event, etc. wrong, it will make what you are saying even more convincing. I am also interested in how Affirmative Action plays in to this argument-it is supposed to function as a way to make up for past prejudice, but some people see it as a new type of racism. I found myself wondering what you thought about it, and whether you would include it in a type of racism that should be changed.
Final Argument (posted RHS April 13-171 April 15)
Prejudice is a universal issue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice surrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against.
Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument simply is that we have grown with time to the point where race is no longer a factor. It's the common misconception that because our world doesn't show the most stereotypical types of racism, such as the jim Crowe laws and lynching out of simple hatred, that we have grown past segregation and that it no longer exists. But, that is far from the truth. Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. I will never forget the time that I once heard someone say that they could never be friends with someone based off of the clothes that the other was wearing. How more cruel and prejudice can you get then that? People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc.. In the work place, it's not uncommon for the sex of the potential employee to play a factor in getting the job position. for example, It's statistically shown that men hold more jobs such as engineers and IT professionals while women occupy more jobs such as nurses, teachers and cleaners (Guardianco.com). These statistics are very stereotypical because men are thought to be more professional and capable of taking on more, while women are thought to be more of the care takers. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there still is the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. Prejudice remains an obvious issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice plays a part in each of these places is extremely disturbing. The opposing argument is the idea that prejudiceness does not play a role in the school systems and workplaces and jobs. That sort of thinking is simply ignorant and frustrating. Just because it's not as obvious as in the past, it's ridiculous for anyone to think that the way individuals are treated differently now based off of differences is okay. It is not okay, it's prejudice. plain and simple. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school. In reality, if you really look at what affirative action is doing, it's a form of prejudice and racism as well. Affirmative action is used as a type of system to make up for prejudice and racism in the past. Shoudn't we be practicing equality all around? ISn't picking the minority automatically over the majority prejudice? That's not equality. Everyone is equal. We all should be treated that way, whether black, white, pink, blue, tall, short, stylish or not.
Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it is obvious that is not the case, and it's extremely disheartening. People are left out every single day due to judgments.While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is much to improve in.I totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about someone before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. Everyone is equal, and it's important for everyone to realize we still have far to go and to fight for it.
Comments:
Prejudice is a universal issue. Many believe that it is not as much of a problem as it actually continues to be. Prejudice surrounds our world in even the smallest of ways. While some people believe that our society has growm out of the prejudice era, many others feel as if their is still so much to improve on. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim crowe laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, there stillmis the issue of being a social outcast due to clothing and the opinions of individuals. It might help to mention race and gender as well as clothing and opinions here, because you do talk about race and gender later in your paper. I believe that as a whole need to take a stance and realize that although we have improved, there still is prejudice to standup against. Although our world has grown in many way since the terrible slavery and racim age., we still do have issues, jut on a smaller scale. The opposing argument simply is that we have grown with time to the point where race is no longer a factor. It's the common misconception that because our world doesn't show the most stereotypical types of racism, such as the jim Crowe laws and lynching out of simple hatred, that we have grown past segregation and that it no longer exists. But, that is far from the truth. Right here would be a good place to talk about some sort of racial prejudice that still exists (and it might be a good place for your talk about affirmative action). Everyday, I witness some sort of prejudice. I will never forget the time that I once heard someone say that they could never be friends with someone based off of the clothes that the other was wearing.This is a good example of appearance-based prejudice that you have seen. However, it might help to mention some sort of racial prejudice before this example, because you switch a bit quickly from talking about segregation and racial prejudice to talking about the appearance-based prejudice you have seen. How more cruel and prejudice can you get then that? People are segregated against in work, social events, schools etc.. In the work place, it's not uncommon for the sex of the potential employee to play a factor in getting the job position. for example, It's statistically shown that men hold more jobs such as engineers and IT professionals while women occupy more jobs such as nurses, teachers and cleaners (Guardianco.com). Great! I am glad to see you bringing in an outside source to strengthen your argument. These statistics are very stereotypical because men are thought to be more professional and capable of taking on more, while women are thought to be more of the care takers. Although yes, we have grown away from Jim Crowe Laws and public lynching due to race, religion and gender, this seems a bit repetitive-is there another way you can say this? there still is the issue of being a social outcast due to the clothing and opinions of individuals.. I wonder if the person observation of prejudice that you mention earlier might fit better right here, when you mention prejudice based on clothing. Prejudice remains an obvious issue in two very important places. School and workplaces are what keeps our world going around and growing, so the fact that prejudice plays a part in each of these places is extremely disturbing. The opposing argument is the idea that prejudiceness does not play a role in the school systems and workplaces and jobs. That sort of thinking is simply ignorant and frustrating. Just because it's not as obvious as in the past, it's ridiculous for anyone to think that the way individuals are treated differently now based off of differences is okay. It is not okay, it's prejudice. plain and simple. Its undeniable though. Although itd be a wonderful thought to think that everything in our world is based off of equality and fairness, it unfortunatley not true. People have outside influneces and already byast opinions in some situations. For example, some people may see someone, and their apperance may remind them of someone else, and thst may give a byast upon the individuals already. This can play a role in hiring of job and in the acceptance of kids in schools.It's is argued that in some cases being the minority plays a positive role in accepting students into a certain school. In reality, if you really look at what affirative action is doing, it's a form of prejudice and racism as well. Affirmative action is used as a type of system to make up for prejudice and racism in the past. Shoudn't we be practicing equality all around? ISn't picking the minority automatically over the majority prejudice? Asking your audience a question like this is a great way to make your argument stronger, because you are asking them to think about it by questioning them. That's not equality. Everyone is equal. We all should be treated that way, whether black, white, pink, blue, tall, short, stylish or not. I enjoyed this summation of your argument. Although we would love to all believe that our populations as a whole holds no prejudice, it is obvious that is not the case, and it's extremely disheartening. People are left out every single day due to judgments.While some people believe that our society has grown out of the prejudice era, many others still believe there is much to improve in.I totally, full heartedly agree with the idea that there still is prejudice in our world and it continues to play a role in way important aspects of our communities. Prejudice comes in many different forms, some ways more obvious, while other ways are more underlying. Holding an opinion about someone before knowing them is prejudice. Not accepting someone because of their race, is very prejudice. Judgments continue to take over our world and opinions, and that needs to change. Everyone is equal, and it's important for everyone to realize we still have far to go and to fight for it. Nice! This ending not only restates your argument, it also encourages your audience to go out and make a change.
This paper is looking great! I enjoyed seeing the outside source brought in while talking about gender stereotypes in the workplace. There are a couple places where I think it would make more sense to switch the order of your arguments (talking about affirmative action after you mention segregation/racial prejudice, and giving your personal experience after you talk about appearance-based prejudice would help your arguments and your examples relate to each other, making the paper stronger). Don’t forget to run spell check at the very end to catch the typos!
Reflection #3 (posted RHS April 23)
After going through this whole process of writing about prejudjce, I've learNed so much. I know that it has made me a stronger writer. It's made me looked farther and deeper into my subject and elaborate more than I would ever in one paper. The argument paper for me was basically a summary of everything I had written on thei subject the past semester. It allowed me to tie everything together and it made me realize in the end the importance of researching the subjects you write about. My writing partner had helped me so much throughout the whole process and I appreciate you do much thank you! Overall it had helped me grow as a writer and the argument essay allowed me to sum up all I had left to say about prejudice and the world today.
Comments:
After going through this whole process of writing about prejudjce, I've learNed so much. I know that it has made me a stronger writer. It's made me looked farther and deeper into my subject and elaborate more than I would ever in one paper. I’m glad to see this in your reflection! Really elaborating and providing details is a huge part of writing, so it’s great to know that this experience has helped solidify that importance for you. The argument paper for me was basically a summary of everything I had written on thei subject the past semester. It allowed me to tie everything together and it made me realize in the end the importance of researching the subjects you write about. I hope you were able to find a lot of connections while tying everything to together, and that you learned something new from your research. My writing partner had helped me so much throughout the whole process and I appreciate you do much thank you! That’s great to hear! I’m glad my comments were helpful to you, and I appreciate your letting me work with you. I’ve learned just as much as you through this collaboration, and I hope that my comments have improved over the semester just as much as your writing has! Overall it had helped me grow as a writer and the argument essay allowed me to sum up all I had left to say about prejudice and the world today.